Charlotte Amelia Moore

Open with the Voices of how long people spend on their phones.  Then the clip of different people walking.  Following that I will have a person walking on their phone then sitting on a bench alone, whilst I have a voice over. Then I will go into the day of someone on their phone, in a city, in a restaurant, on a train, in a shop, in a shopping centre. .. etc. I will continue a voice over however it will be less frequent, something will only be said every 10 seconds. Then I will move onto the interview sequence in which I will need to crop down from my first draft to specific questions either about phones or social media. And I will either have the same people to in my draft or I will change it to the younger, the teenager and just one of the older generation.  Lastly I will have the sequence in which plays different shots with voices from famous people, I will have different locations and different shots of people on their phones.  The highlighted i...

I have made a timeline which is going to help prompt me on what I need to film in the upcoming weeks. I do have some problems with time though, as I have 2 weeks until half term and this is when I go home, so I can't film my family until I am home. So I will need to wait to film that. However I am going to try and film whenever I have time to in these next 2 weeks, I have planned to try and organise if I can film my cousin asking her a few questions and I can also re-film some of my other interviews if I decide to do so. I will also film someone outside, I am yet to decide what order to put each section in. 

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Things to think about: Establish opening - narrative direction, phones or social media? what is the question I am asking? what am I trying to show? - key themes  Consider VoiceOver in beginning. Title sequence - range of people, men, women, tall, short, young old. Transitions too many black screens for too long. Background of interviews , microphone, sound levels. Cut down interviews , possibly have someone younger? Move away from inside, go out of school different locations for interview backgrounds. Cut out credits . Need to work on it being coherent throughout.

Evaluation: Opening: I like the opening of my documentary although the more I watch it the most I want to editing to be run smoother and have even better editing skills. I think rather than going straight into my interview I need something before just to introduce the audience to the topic of my documentary, posing a few questions to get them thinking. I will try and do this as a voice over, so in the upcoming days I need to start thinking of who will be good at doing a VoiceOver for this documentary. Interview:   It then goes into the interview which I think is well filmed however I need to work on the sound levels.  I have left the most relevant, interesting questions but I think I need to see what other people may suggest when I ask for feedback, they may think that the interview gets boring or the questions asked are boring, so I will just have to ask people about that.  Ending: Then (I hope) my editing has a smooth transition into the next section ...

Here is my first draft of my documentary, this is only 4 minutes at the moment so I need to work on adding in an other minute of my production, I think I will get some feedback from people and what they think I am missing. So far I have had feedback from my family saying that there needs to be more of an introduction into the topic of my documentary. Click here for video

From my blog on Jennifer Peedom I have been thinking about how I am going to apply her idea of narrative to my documentary. Finding story in my edit: My 'story' is going to be issue-orientated, around the issue of mobile phones. The goal of this is to simply emphasis how much time we really are beginning to spend on our phones, this idea will hopefully come through in my interviews.. Particularly the question when I ask about the screen time of each person the younger generation will have hours they spend daily on their phones however as the generations get older the screen times becomes minutes as their daily average.  Conflict: I think in my documentary I am presenting a societal conflict between people and phones. Structure: In my production I feel as though my structure isn't yet set in the order of what I want to show, this is because I have a few different sections of what I am doing in my documentary. My first section is the opening which the...